Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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in overcrowded and public
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,while other opinions opposite
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view. From my point of view, restriction
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talking on the smartphone
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crowded places would not be
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idea for humans. For most, communication on the telephone
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public
areas
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uncomfortable situation.
Todays
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, in our modernized life individuals
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their every
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on the roads,
buses
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,
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taxi
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and while they are walking because of lacking
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times
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. And,
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this
kind of
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if someone
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with somebody
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, it can be
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situation for people who are making
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or
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errands.
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school
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children doing their
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home task
while they are going to school on the bus or road, and if someone
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cell phone after it may prevent them to accomplish their tasks.
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,
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on
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the
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overcrowded
areas
should be forbidden.  
However
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overcrowded
areas
may not be
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solution to many problems. Some think that with the process of prohibited dialoguing
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place
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was full of people, we can avoid
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certain problems, but
this
thinking can
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, because
instead
of
this
process, it may be
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for some.
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, when someone walking
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public place meanwhile
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person should accept a call from
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or
him
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job about is he or she
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to work or not, and
this
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person
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not take the call after he or she may
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looses
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respect.
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, individuals should have
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to have
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conservation
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everywhere. To conclude,
although
some advantages of restriction
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phoning
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the community
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such
as
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the uncomfortable condition, I feel that
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not prohibit
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dialoguing can be far more worthwhile.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Disrupt
  • Infringe
  • Social rudeness
  • Public transport
  • Necessity
  • Convenience
  • Emergencies
  • Personal freedom
  • Designated areas
  • Compromise
  • Context
  • Advocating
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