Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #illness #disease #governments #focus #pollution

Enviromental

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Environmental

damage is

occuring

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occurring

at a very fast pace and

people

know that it is a global

pirority

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priority

to save the

enviroment

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environment

. Some of

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that

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is that

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people

should protect sickness and disease before

unhealthy

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they unhealthy

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.In

this

case,

governments

should

control

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air,

water

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and water

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pollution

and housing problems.

Governments

should encourage to

people

for eating

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healthy

foods

. Industries must pay

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higher

taxs

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taxes

tax

for the waste from industries which is

cause

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the cause

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air or water

pollution

On the other hand

governments

should carefully manage the construction of housing. In

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essay, I will discuss the details of

positive

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view.

Firstly

governments

should encourage to eat healthy

foods

in order to avoid obesity.

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governments

allow

to import

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the

healthy

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of healthy

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foods

with no

taxs

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taxes

tax

including

vegetable

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vegetables

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, fruit, other healthy

suplement

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supplement

supplements

medicines or

gym's

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accessaries

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accessories

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, towns or

cities

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management favour

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the gym business or healthy food shops for opening at the good location so that

people

can easy to buy

foods

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food

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or do

exercises

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exercise

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, it is

good

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way to support

people

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health

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governments

Secondly

government

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the government

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should collect

the

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higher tax on the industries which is more

casuse

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cause

the

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pollution

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the

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motor bike

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motorbike

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manufacturing companies should pay more

tax

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taxes

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governments

because

motor bike

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motorbike

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a lot of

emission

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emissions

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to air

pollution

Therefore

government

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the government

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must separate the industry

catagories

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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
5Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
63Grammar mistakes
 

5 paragraphs

328 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

preventive healthcare
environmental regulations
respiratory diseases
public health policies
sanitation facilities
urban planning
communicable diseases
socio-economic factors
sustainable development
government intervention
healthcare infrastructure
industrial emissions
air quality index
affordable housing
mental wellbeing

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Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Many people believe that media coverage of celebrities is having a negative effect on children.To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarket have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packing. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The illustrations show how chocolate is produced. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

Some people believe that studying at university or collage is the best route to a successful career. While others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.