Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Enviromental

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Environmental

damage is

occuring

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occurring

at a very fast pace and

people

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know that it is a global

pirority

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priority

to save the

enviroment

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environment

. Some of

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the

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that

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is that

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people

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should protect sickness and disease before

unhealthy

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they unhealthy

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.In

this

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case,

governments

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should

control

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apply

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air,

water

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and water

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pollution

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and housing problems.

Governments

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should encourage to

people

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for eating

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apply

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healthy

foods

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. Industries must pay

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higher

taxs

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taxes

tax

for the waste from industries which is

cause

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the cause

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air or water

pollution

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governments

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should carefully manage the construction of housing. In

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essay, I will discuss the details of

positive

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view.

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governments

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should encourage to eat healthy

foods

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in order to avoid obesity.

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governments

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allow

to import

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the

healthy

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of healthy

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foods

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with no

taxs

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taxes

tax

including

vegetable

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vegetables

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, fruit, other healthy

suplement

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supplement

supplements

medicines or

gym's

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gym

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accessaries

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accessories

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, towns or

cities

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city

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management favour

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apply

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the gym business or healthy food shops for opening at the good location so that

people

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can easy to buy

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foods

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food

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or do

exercises

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exercise

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, it is

good

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a good

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way to support

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people

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people's

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health

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apply

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governments

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government

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the government

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should collect

the

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higher tax on the industries which is more

casuse

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cause

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pollution

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the

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motor bike

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motorbike

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manufacturing companies should pay more

tax

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taxes

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governments

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because

motor bike

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motorbike

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a lot of

emission

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emissions

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to air

pollution

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government

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must separate the industry

catagories

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.5

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

328 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

preventive healthcare
environmental regulations
respiratory diseases
public health policies
sanitation facilities
urban planning
communicable diseases
socio-economic factors
sustainable development
government intervention
healthcare infrastructure
industrial emissions
air quality index
affordable housing
mental wellbeing

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Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Fresh water reserves are becoming less worldwide. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions that can be done by countries and individuals?

Today more and more people want things instanly (eg.: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

Smoking tobacco is becoming increasingly popular among young people with potentially serious effects on their health. Explain some reason for this problem and suggest some possible solutions.

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for thier future. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?