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It is believed that working in team enhances the skills better then working alone. Do you agree or disagree.

#team #skills
Every individual has
its
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their
his
her
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 own choice
weather
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whether
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 they have to
work
 in a
team
 or alone.
However
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 it is believed that working in a
team
 is more beneficial than working
individualy
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individually
individual
. I strongly agree with the notion of working in
team
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 as
one
 can learn
team
 leadership
skills
, interpersonal
skills
 and many more, which are discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, when someone works in a
team
 they can learn
teamleading
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team leading
team-leading
skills
, how to
divde
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divide
task
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tasks
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 with
one
 another and
also
 co-operate with each other. If
one
team
 member has
lack
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a lack
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of
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apply
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knowledge about any part of the
work
other
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others
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 can help them, but in case you are working alone no
one
 is here
for
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to
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 help you.
Moreover
, companies hire people of different skill-set and assign each and every person a different
task
 which they to
work
in
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on in
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 a
team
,
as a
result
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,result
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 there are more
chanches
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chances
changes
 to learn
diffrent
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different
 ways to
complet
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complete
task
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tasks
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 on time. Another advantage of working in a
team
 is
improvement
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the improvement
an improvement
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 of communication
skills
. it is impossible to enhance
one
's communication
skills
 working alone.
Furthermore
, working
is
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in
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squad
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a squad
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 relieve stress as it is difficult for
one
 person to handle
whole
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the whole
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 project and submit
on
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it on
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 time because when working in
group
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a group
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task
 is divided with
easck
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each
 group
memeber
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member
members
 and everyone can do their part,
cosequently
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consequently
reduce
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reducing
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 the burden and they can give their best output which will result in
overall
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the overall
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 growth of an employee. to conclude, working in
team
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the team
a team
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 not only decrease the stress but
also
 teach plenty of other
skills
such
 as working in a
team
,listen other
people's
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people
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and
enhance
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enhancing
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team
leading
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leadership
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 and communication
skills
 and
give
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giving
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 a chance to
work
 with different
talent
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talented
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 people.
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