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It is believed that working in team enhances the skills better then working alone. Do you agree or disagree.

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Every individual has their own choice whether they have to effort in a club or alone.
However
,it is believed that working in a club is more beneficial than working individually. I strongly agree with the notion of working in a team as one can learn unit leadership
skills
, interpersonal
skills
 and many more, which are discussed in upcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, when someone works in a company they can learn squad leading
skills
, how to divide tasks with each other and
also
 co-operate with each other. If a unit member lack knowledge about any part of the job others can help them, but in case you are working alone no one is here to help you.
Moreover
, companies hire people with different skill-set and assign each and every person a different work which they have to perform in an organization,
as a result
, there are more chances to learn different ways to complete tasks on time. Another advantage of working in a company is the improvement of communication
skills
. it is impossible to enhance someone's communication
skills
 working alone as there is no one
tolisten
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to listen
 you and you cannot talk with anyone.
Furthermore
, working in a squad relieve stress as it is difficult for a person to handle the whole project and submit it on time because when working in a group, work is divided with each group member and everyone can do their part,
consequently
 reducing the burden and
hence
, they can give their best output which will result in the overall growth of an employee. to conclude, working in a team not only decrease stress but
also
 teach plenty of other
skills
such
 as working in a unit, to
listen
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 other people and enhancing club leadership and communication
skills
 and giving a chance to effort with people of different
skills
.
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