Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Many
humans
emphisize
that telephone Correct your spelling
emphasise
conversations
should be prohibited in overcrowded and community sites. However
, some individuals can not support this
idea because they may be have
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have
works
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work
on
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to
works
or study. From my point of view, Fix the agreement mistake
work
people
should be
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use
use
the mobile phone
where
full Correct word choice
when
with
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of
humans
because mobile phone
conversations
may be interrupt
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be interrupted
for
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by
humans
. In this
essay, I discuss both these will considered
and elucidated.
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be considered
people
said that,
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apply
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humans
do not use
the
mobile phones Correct article usage
apply
conversations
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in conversations
crowded
places like school or Change preposition
in crowded
assembly
because if suddenly Fix the agreement mistake
assemblies
telephone
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the telephone
ring
, Fix the agreement mistake
rings
it's
sound may be Correct your spelling
its
distrack
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distract
another individuals
. Replace the adjective
another individual
other individuals
As a result
, they can not hear any kind of laws. Therefore
, it helps to humans
save a peaceful environment in public
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a public
the public
area
. Fix the agreement mistake
areas
Moreover
, when people
keep in touch with family members and close friends by telephone, this
situation
is disrespectful for
other Change preposition
to
humans
. Thus
, it is forbidden to bring the
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apply
phone
into public places. For example
, in my nation, people
should be pay
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paid
fine
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a fine
for
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by
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the goverment
goverment
which Correct your spelling
government
use
the
mobile Correct article usage
apply
phone
for conversations
in overpopulated
area.
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an overpopulated
On the other hand
, some people
strong
believe that, Replace the word
strongly
first
of all, some students live far from their family members. So mobile phone
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phones
important
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are important
to
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for
talking
with their family. Change the form of the verb
talk
Also
, people
use
the
mobile phones anywhere because they may be Correct article usage
apply
have
important calls. If they can not Wrong verb form
having
talking
, it is more harmful Wrong verb form
talk
for
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to
humans
life which is working in a large company. Change the noun form
human
For instance
, firemans
always utilize mobile Correct your spelling
firemen
phone
for Fix the agreement mistake
phones
talking
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taking
any
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about any
situation
because they received almost 95 per sent
calls which are urgent in Correct your spelling
cent
situation
of Add an article
the situation
a situation
people
.
In conclusion, having Correct your spelling
weighed
weighted
everything mentioned up and I can Correct your spelling
weighed
came
to Change the verb form
come
conclusion
that Add an article
the conclusion
humans
must be
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use
use
the mobile phone
for conversation another because they may be any situation
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