Some people believe that mobile phone conversations should be banned in crowded and social places. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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emphasise
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or study. From my point of view,
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use
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humans
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humans
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mobile phones
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in conversations
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places like school or
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because if suddenly
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sound may be
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, when
people
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other
humans
.
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phone
into public places.
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government
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mobile
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area.
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people
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believe that,
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to
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talking
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with their family.
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mobile phones anywhere because they may be
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important calls. If they can not
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, it is more harmful
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humans
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life which is working in a large company.
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always utilize mobile
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for
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situation
because they received almost 95 per
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calls which are urgent in
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of
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weighted
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everything mentioned up and I can
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to
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that
humans
must
be
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use
the mobile
phone
for conversation another because they may be any
situation
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