Some children spend hours every day on smartphones. Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?
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by children
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children
completely gripped by smartphones
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, children
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There are many disadvantages related to this
trend
most important of which are sleep deprivation and shortage of adequate concentration. Children
who are always gripped by smartphones
may well be awake after midnight which definitely leads to sleep deprivation. Also
, as they spend most of their time
on online apps , they find it difficult to concentrate on their lessons because they are always working on their mobiles or even thinking about the apps they use on a regular basis. For example
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children
who have easy and unrestricted access to their phones
24 hours a day, get lower
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Smartphones
assist children
to go hand- in - hand
with technology which is essential in Correct your spelling
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this
modern epoch. Besides
, it helps children
to learn new things ranging from subjects related to their lessons to how to play an instrument. However
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For example
, many children
who are spending the most proportion of their time
on their mobile find it difficult to communicate with their families.
In conclusion, there are many reasons that encourage children
to spend a lot of time
on their phones
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