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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this option

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Some individuals argue that
music
 is an excellent means of uniting
people
 with diverse
believe
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 and ages together. I strongly agree
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this
 view because it bridges cultural misconceptions and fosters
freedom
.
To begin
 with,
music
 has a strong educational role it plays in terms of narrowing or abolishing intercultural belief systems. Meaning it helps to expose the different multicultural ways of the singers, baring their practices, and religions to the rest of the world who
before hand
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 might have certain misconceptions about them ( the singer).
For example
, in Nigeria, the
people
 of Calabar were known to be cannibals, but after a song by a Calabar famous musician who exposed their culture, the rest of the Nigerians now got to understand that they do not eat human flesh.
Furthermore
,
music
 brings a sense of
freeness
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. In the past,
majority
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 of the world's citizens lacked
freedom
, especially in Africa.
Music
 has caused a universal revolution, as
people
 have become grossly aware of their rights through songs.
For Instance
, the song Africa unit, by
late
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 Bob Marley, brought so much compression and the need for
a
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collective
freedom
 and unity by the Africans. In conclusion, I completely opin that
music
 serves as a good instrument in bringing
people
 of different
culture
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cultures
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 and ages together due to its strength in correcting
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the misunderstanding
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misunderstanding
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misunderstandings
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 of
believe
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 systems and the
freedom
 it promotes.
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