Many think that all decisions within a company should be made by managers whereas others feel it is better to include employees in the process. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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some people argue that
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within a company must be made by bosses, while
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think it is better for the employees to be involved.
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essay will discuss both views and in my opinion,
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will agree that it is better for
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to be involved in making a decision. On one hand, one of the reasons why
decision making
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should be for only managers is because it's the protocol or policy for the company to
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for workers.
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to say, some employers prefer to decide what to be done at the workplace in order to avoid conflicts between workers so that employees don't get
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think that bosses have consulted only a few of them and by doing so, some organizations made it a protocol.
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, many people tend to argue a lot at their workstations when their boss
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for their opinions and
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conflicts among them.
On the other hand
, despite the above view, l believe that workers should be consulted during the process of a final conclusion because
this
helps the business to offer better services and make more profits.
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, if the manager asks advice from some of the
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in the organization,
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the business to choose the best option but
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will
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contribute to the growth of the business
hence
increasing profits and giving good services.
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, research made in Uganda has shown that when managers are asked for advice from their
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, and they are considered, it increases the chances of the company
to grow
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faster. In conclusion,
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managers make sole-decision because it's a policy, in my opinion, l believe team decisions a better as they enable the organisation
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faster
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l hope in future group advice is considered before a final conclusion.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Centralized authority
  • Top-down approach
  • Autocratic leadership
  • Managerial hierarchy
  • Operational efficiency
  • Accountability
  • Competence
  • Employee empowerment
  • Participative decision-making
  • Workplace democracy
  • Morale
  • Consensus
  • Bottom-up approach
  • Cross-functional collaboration
  • Organizational culture
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