Many people try to balance work and other parts of their life. However, this is very difficult to do. What are the problems associated with this? What is the best way to achieve a better balance?

It is universally accepted that the
problem
of
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lifestyle
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work
and other parts of life is escalating at an alarming rate.
This
problem
is bringing a state of depression among the masses and in
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too. There are
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of reasons
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possible solutions can be recommended too which are discussed as follows. In
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to the issue, one reason that can be stated is the lack of organization in
people
's lives. In support
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this
reason, a fact known is that the world has always been altering and developing.
Therefore
,
as a result
of that, a higher demand for more obligations not only in
people
's ordinary duties but
also
in their
work
could have been observed. Considering
this
, it becomes evident that those who are less coordinated will confront trouble. Another problematic cause is being unrealistic.
For instance
, if someone works for ten hours a day,
then
he should not expect himself to be
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the same day as well as devoting time to his family. So stressful is
this
expectation, that can result in serious health disorders
besides
the mentioned
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imbalance meant
. Seeing the
problem
with a brighter mind, many
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solutions can be helpful to curb
this
menace. One
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the solution is planning. If
people
prioritize their
work
,
then
not only will they surprisingly enhance their function at
work
, but
also
they will save a considerable amount of time which in return helps them to create a suitable balance between their
work
and other parts of their life.
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claimed by him that he could not have encountered
such
success and balance in his life without his "
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employers should reduce the working hours, so that the employees find an
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opportunity
to rest and administer their non-
work
related duties.
Lastly
acquiring a sense of being realistic can introduce many beneficial results, including a balance in lifestyle. To
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conclude
, solving a global issue is not easy but
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efforts of the
people
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control can be taken over the
problem
with the
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aforementioned
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suggested
measures. I perceive that everyone should come forward to mitigate
this
problem
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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