Some people say that to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus more on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems.

It is believed that

illness

and

disease

are

resulted

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from external factors related to the

environment

and housing. The government should make more efforts to mitigate environmental

pollution

and housing problems. From my perspective, I totally agree that

this

is a potential way to prevent

illness

and

disease

.

First

of all, the significant reason that explains why reducing environmental

pollution

is worth protecting

people

’s health is the speed of spreading viruses.

Although

viruses are tiny creatures, depending on the variety of substances in the

environment

, especially the polluted

environment

, the number of viruses in the atmosphere increases significantly and

develop

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many different variables.

Consequently

,

people

are easily attacked by them during the process of absorbing oxygen for survival because they will integrate

in

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the flow of air to pervade the human body.

Therefore

, if

the

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environmental

pollution

is reduced, the probability of patients getting

disease

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by

virus

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may go down.

Furthermore

, housing is

also

a conscious problem when discussing reducing health problems of

people

. At present, there are many

people

who are homeless or poor and living in slum areas leading to low access to medical conditions when getting sick.

Moreover

, due to the effects of external factors

such

as lacking

foods

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, not hygienic

environment

, etc., they usually get diseases related to respiratory, gastrointestinal or skin infections.

Hence

,

this

may motivate the government to provide social housing to the homeless or raise funding to help

people

in slums

to

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afford houses.

This

step is helpful to mitigate

illness

and

disease

in society. In conclusion, I would restate that environmental

pollution

and housing issues in many regions are the major causes of

illness

and

disease

, so the government should pay more attention to

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these causes.