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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#families #children #schools #taxes #support #education #system
Some people believe that their children who attend
the
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private
schools
 do not need to contribute
the
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 state
taxes
 because of helping the
education
 system. I completely disagree with
this
 view. I would like to describe in
this
 essay why
i
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not
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do not
did not
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 support
with
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this
 topic.
Firstly
, every person
have
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 own responsibility to
taxes
 on time. Because of it has been contributing to cover some government expenses
such
 as
puplic
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public
 service salary and need capital for development projects.
Otherwise
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 if we give tax reduction for
wearthy
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wealthy
 people who send their children to private
schools
 might negatively
efect
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effect
affect
 on poor families who pay
taxes
. Another reason why I disagree with that statement, we should give equal opportunities for all
student
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students
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 to have proper
education
.
Although
, we need to support public
schools
 as well. Because all pupils have
own
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rights
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right
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 to get equal
education
 from private or public
schools
. It may result
to
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 product well
eductate
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educated
educate
 generations.
Furthermore
,
more
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 difficult process for tax reduction from one side of families and
government
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the government
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 should encourage people to
paying
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pay
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 their
taxes
. In
Coclusion
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Conclusion
,we should hot provide any financial benefit
those
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 who choose private
education
 and
government
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the government
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, always could
be provide
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provide
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benefit
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benefits
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 to
increse
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increase
more
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Job
oppertunities
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opportunities
 and encourage
investores
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investors
 to invest capital
for
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to
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 start
new
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business
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businesses
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. Because they have
well educated
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well-educated
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 workforce and employees always willing to recruit
eductated
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educated
 employers. It would be
benifical
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beneficial
 to output more productivity of goods and lead to
increse
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increase
 companies income. Finely, Well educated workforce is the key to a prosperous nation and helping to
incress
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increase
 national income.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • tax exemption
  • public education
  • private schools
  • collective responsibility
  • societal welfare
  • equitable access
  • financial burden
  • social cohesion
  • tax credits
  • vouchers
  • subsidies
  • state-funded
  • socioeconomic disparities
  • public vs. private sector
  • quality of education
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