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Studying business or science related subjects at university level is more important than arts related courses like literature. Do you agree or disagree?

#business #science #subjects #university #level #arts #courses #literature
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There is an opinion that
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 are not as necessary as business or science
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 at universities. I completely disagree with
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 point of view for two reasons.
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,
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' minds are developed by all creative
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.
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, they will be in high demand in the future since they will be able to create advertisements or new ideas that can help run a business or other professions.
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, if
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 didn’t study literature, they would not be able to speak correctly or argue their perspectives.
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, they have a wide view
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world
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, and it will help them for creating various stuff. 
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,
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plenty of science
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 are combined with
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courses
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. Obviously, if the scientists were uncreative, they could not discover a lot of things. Admittedly, Albert Einstein was right when he said, «I never made one of my discoveries through the process of rational thinking».
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, owning
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courses
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students
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 have
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  ability to represent
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real life
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 world and work.  In conclusion,
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 essay does not support the idea that
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courses
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 are less relevant than science or business, as
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 will not be all-rounded and have limited exposure.
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, universities should pay more attention to these
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