you have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. you don't fully agree with this opinion. say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers offer to give guided tour of your twon to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir/ Madam, I am Vinod from Pune, a Shivaji Nagar

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centre manager. I am writing

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centres, in your News Paper- The Hindu. The article is well written and

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to be taken to improve the facility specifically

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the seminar hall,

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activity centre.

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to bring out the problems, the representation was too generic. There are some

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Shivaji Nagar, and Hadapsar

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considering their location and resource access, sophisticated physical activity centre and seminar halls . But , it was not specified anywhere in the news

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sophisticated sites he may have

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perspective than what he had written. I Could offer a guided tour to the writer in our

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. Could you please inform me

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willingness and

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, so that I can arrange things

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Look forward to your reply. Yours sincerely, Vinod

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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