We are becoming increasingly dependent on computer-based technology how do you think it will change in the future? Is it good for us to rely so much on computers?
Many people these days rely more and more on their computers and phones for many things.
such
as entertainment, work and study. will this
dependency on technology
change in the future? and is this
even a good thing for humanity? In this
essay
I will try to answer both of these questions and include why I think Add a comma
essay,
technology
is vital for us to advance and improve our lives.
As technology
improves, I believe we will rely on it more than we ever did before. It will become easier and faster to use
with many features and abilities. For example
, a new company called Nurallink is developing a new technology
to attach a chip to a human brain and using this
chip you can control your phone or computer without touching it. In addition
. it can send data directly to your brain like images and videos even if you're blind. So it is like having a phone directly connected to your head and you can send, receive and search for information by just thinking about it. This
is just one example of new technology
and there are many others that I believe will change how we live in the future in a good way.
While
it is true that relying on technology
too much can have many drawbacks, I believe technology
is and will be an important part of everyone
's lives and we will not be able to avoid it. You will have to use
technology
even for long periods of time if you want to keep up with everyone
else. For example
, when phones first came out some people did not like them and rarely use
them, so they lost touch with what Wrong verb form
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going on in the world or they were not able to communicate with their families and friends because Wrong verb form
was
everyone
and everything is
online. All the news and social media can be accessed using a phone. so these same people who decided not to Wrong verb form
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use
new technology
were left out. I believe the same thing will happen in the future with new technologies. So even with the negative things that come with new technologies, you will likely be forced to use
them to be a part of society.
In summary, I think that technology
will improve very fast and it will be even more widely used than now so we will have to rely on it for almost everything and hopefully improve our lives for the better, and even if don't like these new technologies, if there are useful and everyone
uses them we will have to adapt them to keep up.Submitted by yousefalyousef2040 on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite