Human activity has damaged the environment all around the world. Some people think that humans cannot stop damaging the planet where as other believe that we can alter our behaviour and prevent future damage. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Environmental
damage
such
as
pollution
,
forest
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and forest
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destroying
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destruction
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are
global
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a global
the global
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problem
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problems
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now a days
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nowadays
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. But
people
should interact with
environment
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the environment
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to
fulfill
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fulfil
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their
day to
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day-to-day
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day
life. Human activities become
major
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a major
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thread
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threat
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to our planet. Some
community
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communities
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suppose these activities can not stop contrary others think if we can alter our behaviour
then
future
damage
will be decreased. Today, the
world
depends on industries.
On
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the
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other words,we live in
industrial
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an industrial
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world
. So most of the
people
in
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around
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globe
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the globe
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depends
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depend
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on their salaries.Industries create job
oppotunities
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opportunities
and
people
work in
factories
for their
livinghood
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living hood
Livingood
.Most of these
factories
directly connect
for
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to
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environmental
pollution
.
For instance
,air
pollution
,light
pollution
,water
pollution
as well as forest
destroying
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destruction
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.There is
good
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a good
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example
for
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of
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contribution
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the contribution
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of
people
to environmental
pollution
,
last
covid 19 era most
of
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apply
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the
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factories
closed for nearly one year.So researchers identified ozone layer has
rebuild
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rebuilt
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its
damage
but the argument is, the government can not close
factories
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, therefore,
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therefore
all economic system in the
world
depends on
the
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apply
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industries.Just as they argue there is nothing to do with activities that
has
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have
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damaged the
environment
.
On the other hand
,some nature lovers and communities argue, when we are trying to reduce
damage
then
we can make
better
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a better
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world
in future.There are so many unidentifying diseases,
illnesses
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and illnesses
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today. Scientists suppose most of them are caused by
environmrntal
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environmental
pollution
.
For example
, skin cancer patients are increasing
day
by
day
.One of the reasons is bad
sunlights
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sunlight
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because they have reached to
world
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the world
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through
damaged
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the damaged
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ozone layer. Forest
destroying
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destruction
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is
huge
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a huge
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effect
to
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on
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diversity
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the diversity
a diversity
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of animals and plants.So we should do everything to protect our
environment
for
future
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the future
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. As if it is so tiny effect. The
last
red
indian
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Indian
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leader once said that there is no nature,
there
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is no human.
In contrast
to
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apply
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there is no industrial
world
there
is
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are
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no developments.So we should live wisely with our
environment
.We should
develope
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develop
our countries while
protect
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protecting
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environment
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the environment
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.
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