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you have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. you don't fully agree with this opinion. say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers offer to give guided tour of your twon to the writer of the article

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter in response
of
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 your news article about
town
 centres in our country. I would like to disagree with your destructive criticism that all city centres in the country are
same
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.
Although
 the infrastructure facilities may be the same and
needs
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 to improve, there are several differences visibly
appear
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 between the different place.
In my
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town
 centre , palava, contains
advanced
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an advanced
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 shopping mall facility ,
Fitness
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a Fitness
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 centre with sophisticated
equipments
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 and advanced parking facilities compared to some other
town
 halls. But
this
 fact was
no where
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 appeared in the article,
instead
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 it contain only
an
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unfair truthless blames. I recommend
,
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you may highlight
such
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error
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 in your upcoming articles. If it is possible, could you visit our
town ship
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township
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.
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Hence
 , you can get an insight that how actually our
town ship
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unique
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 in its features. I am sure that it will be an excellent experience for you and definitely would help to revise your opinion. I can arrange the guided tour for you
,
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 if you can give me your convenient time. Look forward to your reply Yours sincerely, Vinod
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