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What is more important job satisfsction or job security. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#job #satisfsction #security
The graph illustrates the phenomena of how the
water
 cycling system work. Overall, Three Major phenomena of
water
 cycling are Evaporation, condensation, and precipitation, and it
also
 depicts how with the help of Lakes and Layers, it travels back into the ocean. The process starts with Evaporation, where the ocean almost gives out 80% of its
water
vapor
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 in the air.
Afterward
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, condensation occurs on a sunny day, which causes the formation of clouds.
However
, when the clouds are big enough,
then
 it results in rain or precipitation.
Furthermore
, Rainwater is distributed in different sources of
water
. Some
water
 drains into the Lakes, and other
water
 bodies
,
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 and some volume of it is absorbed by plants. The
water
 from the upper region or mountains where snow melts and the surface runs off
also
 results in
water
 falling into groundwater that, through an impervious layer, goes into the ocean, along with the saltwater intrusion, and the same cycle begins again.
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