Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

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people
use distance learning
program
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programs
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to study at home, but some
people
think that it cannot bring the benefit as much
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college or
universities
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university
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. It is widely
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on that most
of
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the
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people
would rather study at home rather than
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college or
universities
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university
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. I firmly agree with
this
view that
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face-to-face
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face
-to-
face
conversation is vital. To clarify, it is true that
paper based
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study is a broken-down method. In
this
regard
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modern
people
are keen to substitute it with internet funds.
Furthermore
, online learning is
convinent
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convenient
, as they will obtain knowledge .
For instance
, many
people
have duties at home so
they
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powerless to attend college or university but they can coordinate their online
class
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classes
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according to their schedules.
On the other hand
, it is definite that online
education
cannot replace the old method of teaching . As these changes can
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negatively
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influence
on
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apply
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their interpersonal skills ,
such
as communication and cooperation with the contemporary. In
this
regards
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face
to
face
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communication is critical for the
students
. Due to
which
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this
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they increase more knowledge and will turn into a good leader and speaker in the future .
For instance
, most
people
who cannot communicate with other
people
,
this
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apply
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will turn to
lack
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a lack
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of confidence, because of which
this
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apply
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can vitiate
to
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their career opportunities. I think most
students
agree with online
education
because online
education
is really dull and most
students
don't gain knowledge well. There is no rule in online
education
. In my
opinion
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,opinion
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ofline
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online
offline
education
is
effectable
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effective
for
students
.
For instance
, each student does
thier
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their
homework
in
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apply
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ofline
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offline
because the teacher
check
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checks
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out their
hometask
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home task
and it is beneficial for
young
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the young
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. So I would rather select
ofline
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offline
online
education
. In conclusion,
although
many
people
suppose online studying is beneficial for
the
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citizens. In regards , I rely on that
students
should be taught at
university
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universities
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and other academic institutions, as nowadays ,
distance acquiring
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skill
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skills
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in
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cannot substitute the old methods.
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