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Many people use distance learning program to study at home, but some people think that it cannot bring the benefit as much attending college or universities. To what extent do you agree and disagree?

Most people prefer to
study
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 online to stay at home
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however
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; however
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, others
belive
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believe
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 that it
does
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is
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 not able to bring more profit as to go to
unversity
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university
 or
colleage
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college
. I agree
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this
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with this
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 view
which
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that
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pupils
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 should go to
unvesity
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university
 or
colleage
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college
.
l
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 will share my own view in the upcoming paragraphs
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,
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namely
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namely,
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l
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I
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 will try to explain why
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I choose
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choose
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chose
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this
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way
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. In t he modern
time
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times
show examples
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,
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most people
use
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distance
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 learning
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programmes
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programme
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the
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. The
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cause
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reason
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of
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for
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this
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 they
account
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find
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this
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way
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apply
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more comfortable and efficient
rather
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apply
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than
old
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the old
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 method
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,
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which
write
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involved writing
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paper
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papers
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and
read
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reading
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book
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books
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. And
also
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 many
unversities
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universities
 and
colleages
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colleges
use
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distance
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 learning
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programmes
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programme
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 in modern cities.
For instance
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 , in the Filandies schools, most
pupils
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study
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 online
,
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;
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 if they go to school , they do not
use
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 paper and pen , they
use
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planshet
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a plan sheet
 or
computer
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a computer
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 to do exercises .
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Nevertheless
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Nevertheless,
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 they stand in three
rank
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ranks
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in
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apply
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among the best schools
row
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in terms
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 which the highest level of
study
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 and
teach
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teaching
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of
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in
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 these schools . Their goals and the reason
of
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for
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 the best school,they are going to provide the
pupils
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with study
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study free
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free study
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 and they want to learn new
tecnolohies
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technologies
and
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, and
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also
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 they try to invite gadgets which more
politable
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portable
 than others
However
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,
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l
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I
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 prefer
to
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that
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pupils
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 should attend
to
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apply
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school to get
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a goon
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goon
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good
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lesson
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education
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the
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. The
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 reason why some people who live in
village
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villages
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 or small
town
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towns
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can not
study
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 online because they always have
problem
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problems
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of
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with
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internet
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the internet
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, so the
programme
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do
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is
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 not suitable for
some
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apply
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them.And
also
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this
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programme
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 is made much
awkwards
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awkward
 in our country .
For example
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,when the "
Corona virus
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coronavirus
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 "
infecton
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infection
is
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apply
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came
in
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into
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 our country
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,
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all places
are
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were
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 closed and
enounsed
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enforced
karantin
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quarantine
 for all
folks
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people
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, the reason why
this
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 infection is passed through
air
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the air
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, so many
pupils
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 had to
use
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distance
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a distance
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 learning
programme
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. The result
the
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of the
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 education system quality is down ,because some
pupils
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even did not
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did not even
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study
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; instaed
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instaed
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instead
of
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apply
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it they worked
,the
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. The
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 results
are
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apply
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show that
the
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apply
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Uzbekistan
do
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is
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 not ready to
study
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trough
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through
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distance
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a distance
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leaning
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learning
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programme
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 .Any
way
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l
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I
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 prefer we
use
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old
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the old
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 method because
this
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way
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 has been proving efficient for a long
years
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time
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. In conclusion,
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study
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studying
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 offline is better for
pupils
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 than other ways in any situation
the
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. The
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cause
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reason
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of
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for
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this
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Verb problem
is the
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the
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that
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 teachers can control their students
as well
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as
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and
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pupils
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 can get
lesson
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lessons
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 well.

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planning
Be clear on your view in the first part. State if you think online study is good or not, and why.
structure
Use 2 or 3 main ideas and back them with one or two simple examples.
language
Use simple and short sentences. Check spelling and fix big errors.
coherence
Link ideas with small words like and, but, also, then to show how ideas fit.
format
Have a short intro and a short ending that sum up your view.
accuracy
Check facts and keep to the topic. Do not add too many loose thoughts.
content
You show a clear view on the topic.
example
Some real examples are used (like virus time) to show why people used online study.
balance
The compare of online and offline study is set up to argue your point.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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