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Some people say that individuals should change jobs during their working life often while others believe that doing the same job has advantages to individuals, companies, and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Introduction
Nowadays have are people believe their change
more
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apply
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careers are best
to
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for
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them
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their
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life
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 but some people
their
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apply
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believe doing
same
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the same
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job
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 will be more
advantages
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advantageous
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 for them,companies
andsociety
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and society
society
.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with,I will talk about people
believe
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who believe
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 in more careers
arebest
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are best
to
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for
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them
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their
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in life
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life
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live
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first
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 paragraph and will talk about doing
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the same
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same
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some
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 work have advantages more for their
life
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 after.
Body paragraph 2
Firstly
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,I think someone who
believe
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believes
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 doing more
job
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are
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is
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 better because their think experience in
life
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are
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is
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value
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valued
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 more
thanothers
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than others
 thing and
some time
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sometimes
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i
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I
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 think that
a
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an
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 adventure more than doing their expert skill.
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,
experience
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the experience
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 can lead them to have more
creative
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creativity
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or
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apply
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idea
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ideas
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on
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for
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 another
job
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 and in normal
life
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.
in addition
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Body paragraph 3
,
their
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there
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 have more adventure due to if you do you don't
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an expert
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expert
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expect
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that
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which
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 will not make you have
enogh
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enough
confident
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confidence
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 and that will release insulin to give you
have
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apply
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power.
Body paragraph 4
Secondly
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,I will talk about someone who
think
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thinks
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 doing
same
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the same
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job
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 have advantages more for their
life
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,
may be
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maybe
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 their peoples believe
one
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 human can only focus
in
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on
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one
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 thing.
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,If
their
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they're
they are
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 just only
focus
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focused
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in
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on
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one
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 thing will
be do
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do
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 better
more
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apply
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than do two or three
thing
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things
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in
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at
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 the same time.
Conclusion
In conclusion,my opinion is anyone
have
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has
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own
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their own
his own
her own
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ways
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way
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 in their
life
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 and that
are
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is
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 their choice to select
own
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their own
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life
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what
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and what
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 are their
want
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wants
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 to do.
However
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,for me I think my way is doing
in
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apply
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one
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job
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 is better than
change
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changing
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 jobs during
their
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my
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 working
life
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 because of me is like to focus and doing in
one
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 thing at
the
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a
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 time.

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