Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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consider that
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should accept male and female
students
in the same numbers. I totally disagree with
this
and I will explain my opinion below. In my opinion, it is unfair trying to balance the proportion of male and female
students
so it can be equal. I have a perspective that
students
should not get accepted into
university
based on their
gender
.
Furthermore
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should do the selection based on the exam scores because it will show how capable
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the student
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be
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part of their
university
preference. I suggest that
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can rank all of the
students
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, regardless of what
gender
they
are
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prefer
to
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. I realize that there are many cases where more
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than
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when it comes to the number of people in one class.
However
, I believe that it is nothing but
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thing that happens nowadays. The important things are the
students
can get into their dream
university
, get their dream major, and get along with all of their friends. There is nothing to do with
gender
itself. To conclude,
gender
is not a barrier for someone to get their
university
acceptance letter. There is no point in putting
gender
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for
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selection process.
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