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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female student in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

#universities #numbers #student
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 consider that
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 should accept male and female
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 in the same numbers. I totally disagree with
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 and I will explain my opinion below. In my opinion, it is unfair trying to balance the proportion of male and female
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 so it can be equal. I have a perspective that
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 should not get accepted into
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 based on their
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 should do the selection based on the exam scores because it will show how capable
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the student
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part of their
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 preference. I suggest that
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can rank all of the
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 on their score
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, regardless of what
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prefer
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. I realize that there are many cases where more
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women
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 than
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 when it comes to the number of people in one class.
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, I believe that it is nothing but
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 thing that happens nowadays. The important things are the
students
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 can get into their dream
university
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, get their dream major, and get along with all of their friends. There is nothing to do with
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 itself. To conclude,
gender
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 is not a barrier for someone to get their
university
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 acceptance letter. There is no point in putting
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 selection process.
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