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Read the question below. You will have 30 minutes to plan, write, and revise your essay. Typically an effective essay will contain a minimum of 300 words. There are many ways for an organization to find employees. Which do you think is the best way to find suitable employees? ▪Advertising in professional journals ▪Using personal recommendations ▪Recruiting at job fairs Give reasons or examples to support your opinion.

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In today’s modern world, there are a high number of ways for a company to recruit suitable
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 candidates
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 as using professional advertisements
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 journals, personal recommendations, and
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 fairs.
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 each recruitment method has its own benefits, I completely believe that using advertisements is the most ideal for several reasons. It is clear that placing ads in professional journals helps individuals easily
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, and the
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 information is provided clearly to readers.
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, being both accessible
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 hours per day and being available everywhere, advertisements are always valuable to
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 news.
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, a wider audience can choose
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 professions they are looking for in order to apply.
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, vacancy-related information posted is very specific about the field. To illustrate, employers who desire to hire an expert in chemistry can post
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job
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 description, requirements, benefits, and contact via email in order that
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 seekers can read to know whether they can fulfil the demands or not.
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, the drawbacks of personal recommendations should be mentioned. The disadvantage is that a person who is recommended could be not qualified enough.
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, some people use their personal relationships to introduce their relatives who are unqualified or possess irrelevant majors to
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 positions, so
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 is harmful to their companies in a long run. The drawback of
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 fairs is obviously infrequent organization. One
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 fair is normally held for a short period of time or waits too long to be organized, and there is a shortage of visitors as they are located from their living areas. In conclusion, the features of
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advertisement
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advertisements
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on
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 newspapers or magazines are convenient compared to personal recommendations and
job
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 fairs.
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,
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 deployment should be taken into account when recruiters need to hire new members for their company.
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