Some people say that too much attention and many resources are given in the protection of wild animals and birds. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

some arguments are held about whether
wildlife
receive
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a great deal of surveillance and a large number of facilities to be preserved or not. I side with those people who think too much attention and many resources are given
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wildlife
protection since some strict measures are taken in
this
regard which
i
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discuss in
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as
follow
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: Annually, boundless
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are allocated by
government
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in order to preserve
animals
and
birds
.
For instance
, some rules are made to avoid
wildlife
from haunting or many scientists are in charge to find some solutions to tackle with
extinction
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of
animals
and
birds
.
Although
, many of them have already been killed or
dead
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due to human activities for their meat and skin, a myriad of them are protected through adopting reasonable policy by
policy makers
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.
In addition
, advocates of
animals
and
birds
have been trying to produce content about
protection
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of
wildlife
through publishing virtually some videos on the internet or holding courses in schools or universities in order to encourage people to be careful about
wildlife
and make them
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cognizant of all ways and means that
threat
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them.
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one of my
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have become vegetarian when he
had
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watched a movie in which many
animals
got slaughtered by humans. Overall, some people claim that too much care and facilities are given
in
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the protection
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protection
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of
animals
and
birds
. I agree with
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notion as
policy
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a policy
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maker
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or government take some actions
such
as making rules, responsible scientists, and advertising in
this
regard
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecological balance
  • species extinction
  • wildlife conservation
  • sustainable development
  • ecosystem services
  • habitat destruction
  • endangered species
  • conservation efforts
  • natural heritage
  • human encroachment
  • poaching
  • genetic diversity
  • climate change
  • environmental stewardship
  • protection measures
  • wildlife sanctuary
  • biological significance
  • conservation biology
  • environmental advocacy
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