A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion

A large group of
people
stands against the exploitation faced by
animals
and
advocate
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for their
rights
.
On the other hand
, a section believes
using
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the
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animals
for their personal benefits
such
as
food
and benefits of society
such
as research. For a long time
animals
are being used
as
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for
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a recreational activities
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a recreational activity
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in zoos and circuses. A group of
people
feels
this
is curtailment in
freedom
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the freedom
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rights
of
animals
.
Also
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they have been used as
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a beast
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beast
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beasts
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of burden, with a lot of work taken out of them and returning nothing in return. These
people
also
argue that rather than providing them
rights
they are killed for
food
, for leather
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of our cosmetics Ex and for
what not
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. They are
also
made
a
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subject of experiments in the name of research. Another section of
people
thinks that
the
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humans can make use of
animals
for
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the
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advantage. They think
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an animal
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animal
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animals
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should be used for
food
, as they provide an essential nutrient in form of proteins which cannot be found in plants. Somehow economy is
also
dependent on the
animals
as
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in
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food
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the food
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business, leather business and medicinal development research Which is dependent on
use
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the use
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of
animals
. There are a lot of places in the world where modern technology and roads haven't arrived yet.
Animals
are used
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for farming
of
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lands that
people
depend on for
the
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food
and for the transport process. Harsh cards and block cards are used for
such
purposes. In my opinion, if
animals
are stopped
being
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used and given equal
rights
,
this
will create
a
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chaos in the world. The growth of
animals
will be unchecked.
People
won't be able to step out of their homes
in
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fear of getting attacked
from
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animals
. There will be no new medicines or the humans will have to be volunteering for
testing
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of new medicines. There will be a strong deficiency of protein
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a
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human
body's
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. In
short
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it will disturb everything. So according to me, we need to use
animals
for these positive purposes. I believe
this
You should be a balanced 1. If we keep using them in large numbers and leaving a very small number of them,
this
will disturb the
food
chain and
consequently
affect
the
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nature. So some things should be used in a balanced manner in nature in order to sustain the balance of life
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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