Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued by some that every country must provide free medical services, despite the fact that some therapies will not be affordable. I agree that it is important for the government to ensure free medical care
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since covering up the basic needs directly affects the quality of a nation's life and the level of spreading
diseases
.
First
of all,
healthcare
is a fundamental human right and it should not be taken away from anyone because they are struggling financially.
Moreover
, making basic
healthcare
free would tremendously help these people to not go bankrupt after receiving it and
instead
would support them to stay productive.
For example
, big companies like Google provide their workers with full medical insurance which allows them to care about their health before it gets worse.
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, since
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basic need
such
as staying healthy is covered, it significantly increases the quality of
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life, which positively affects their performance at work.
This
approach could be applied at the country level as well.
Secondly
, affordable
healthcare
could significantly decrease the spread of
diseases
and viruses. If everyone could have a free opportunity to prevent their disease
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antivaccine, its spreading would be much lower. In some cases, when people get
diseases
they usually look into the cost of the treatment and realise the treatment is out of their budget and
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to deny the treatment.
This
is how they start spreading the disease to others. If doctor visits and vaccinations and antibiotics were free the
diseases
would not travel as much and as often. Overall, free
healthcare
is a crucial right of each and every
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. It can prevent the suffering of
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people with financial problems and can stop
spreading
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diseases
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and viruses around the countries.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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