People shopping depend more on age group they belong to than other factors to what extent do you agree or disagree.
In
this
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21th
century, Change the ending
21st
people
nowadays are getting more shopaholic compared to the past. Use synonyms
People
are following Use synonyms
latest
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the latest
a latest
trend
to compete with Fix the agreement mistake
trends
other
. Well, shopping depends upon Fix the agreement mistake
others
particular
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a particular
age
group, as young Use synonyms
people
like Use synonyms
to
to do more shopping. I will discuss both these views in the upcoming paragraph.
To commence with, we can see that young Change preposition
apply
people
nowadays do more shopping compared to other Use synonyms
afe
Correct your spelling
safe
of
age
people
. Young Use synonyms
people
know more about trends from Use synonyms
variety
of social media, and Add an article
a variety
also
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as in
their Change preposition
at
Use synonyms
age
they like to wear fashionable Add a comma
,age
clothes
. Use synonyms
Secondly
, as teenagers are in schools and colleges, where they have to wear different Linking Words
clothes
, so as they are young in their college days, so obviously, they are going to do more shopping. To end up with, young Use synonyms
people
are more Use synonyms
attrached
to fashion, as soon as new trends Correct your spelling
attracted
attached
coming
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come
in
the market, Change preposition
on
the
eagerly want to buy things, rather Correct your spelling
they
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then
seeing Replace the word
than
there
price tags or any other thing.
Correct your spelling
their
On the other hand
, it really does not depend upon Linking Words
age
group, Use synonyms
Firstly
, shopping Linking Words
also
depends on one individual's financial capacity, as if they belong to wealthy families, they will do more shopping. Linking Words
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Secondly
after Add a comma
,Secondly
certain
Add an article
a certain
age
like after fifty, Use synonyms
interest
of Add an article
the interest
people
get decreased for Use synonyms
intance
old Correct your spelling
instance
people
think that it is Use synonyms
Correct article usage
a completely
completely
waste of money, and Change the word
complete
also
some believe that wearing fashionable Linking Words
clothes
does not show their status.
To sum up, with I completely agree with the statement that, shopping depends upon the particular Use synonyms
age
group and basically adults like to wear different kinds of Use synonyms
clothes
compared to older Use synonyms
people
.Use synonyms
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite