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More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?

#people #drinks
In recent times,
people
 are drinking
drinks
 which are sugar-based without knowing
outcomes
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the outcomes
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 or they
drink
it
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them
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 for their health.
This
 disquisition will discuss the possible reasons for
this
 and solutions
of
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to
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 it. To commence with, there are more
products
 are in
market
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the market
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 compared to
past
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the past
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 and
people
tends
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tend
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 to
drink
 them more. The possible reason can be the advertisements that have been done by the manufacturer, they call their product
as
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an energy
drink
 and they try to influence the younger generation because they believe that to increase
the
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productivity the target age group should be youngsters.
In addition
,
younger
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the younger
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 generation
follow
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follows
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 it blindly and it becomes a trend and everyone tries it and
this
 is how
marketting
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marketing
 works. Another reason can be unawareness, most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 are not aware
about
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of
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 the results of having excessive
sugar based
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sugar-based
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drinks
, there
are
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is
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number
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a number
the number
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 of non-sugar-based
products
 available but there is no point because individuals
does
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do
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 not even know, whether it is advantageous or disadvantageous for them.
For example
, an energy
drink
 named
as
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apply
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red-bull advertises its
products
in
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on
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 different platforms and
their
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its
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 signature quote is
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that
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the
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that
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the
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redbull
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Redbull
red bull
RedBull
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 gives you wings which states that you become refreshed every time whenever you
drink
 it. To overcome
this
 problem, advertisers should aware
people
 about the outcomes of sugar-based
drink
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drinks
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.
Additionally
, the content restriction should be written
on
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in
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 big letters, which can be seen by individuals easily, and they get aware
about
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of
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 the product they are having.
For example
, many
products
 have their description and safety precautions on their back but it is in very small letters and
people
 ignores
it
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them
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 and later they get
suffer
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to suffer
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 from
disease
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a disease
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 like high sugar. In conclusion, many
people
 have sugar-based
drinks
 without considering the outcomes, but they have to be aware
about
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of
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 the
products
 and
it
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their
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 contents which are written on the back. Some
people
 think that having sugar-based
drinks
 keeps them hydrated and refreshed but in the near
future
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 they can suffer from different diseases.
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