More and more people today are drinking sugar-based drinks. What are the reasons for this? What are the solutions?
In recent times,
people
are drinking drinks
which are sugar-based without knowing outcomes
or they Correct article usage
the outcomes
drink
it
for their health. Correct pronoun usage
them
This
disquisition will discuss the possible reasons for this
and solutions of
it.
To commence with, there are more Change preposition
to
products
are in market
compared to Add an article
the market
past
and Correct article usage
the past
people
tends
to Correct subject-verb agreement
tend
drink
them more. The possible reason can be the advertisements that have been done by the manufacturer, they call their product as
an energy Change preposition
apply
drink
and they try to influence the younger generation because they believe that to increase the
productivity the target age group should be youngsters. Correct article usage
apply
In addition
, younger
generation Correct article usage
the younger
follow
it blindly and it becomes a trend and everyone tries it and Change the verb form
follows
this
is how marketting
works. Another reason can be unawareness, most Correct your spelling
marketing
of
Change preposition
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
people
are not aware about
the results of having excessive Change the preposition
of
sugar based
Add a hyphen
sugar-based
drinks
, there are
Change the verb form
is
number
of non-sugar-based Change the article
a number
the number
products
available but there is no point because individuals does
not even know, whether it is advantageous or disadvantageous for them. Change the verb form
do
For example
, an energy drink
named as
red-bull advertises its Correct word choice
apply
products
in
different platforms and Change preposition
on
their
signature quote is Correct pronoun usage
its
Correct determiner usage
that
the
Correct your spelling
that
the
Remove the redundancy
apply
redbull
gives you wings which states that you become refreshed every time whenever you Change the capitalization
Redbull
red bull
RedBull
drink
it.
To overcome this
problem, advertisers should aware people
about the outcomes of sugar-based drink
. Fix the agreement mistake
drinks
Additionally
, the content restriction should be written on
big letters, which can be seen by individuals easily, and they get aware Change preposition
in
about
the product they are having. Change preposition
of
For example
, many products
have their description and safety precautions on their back but it is in very small letters and people
ignores it
and later they get Correct pronoun usage
them
suffer
from Add the particle
to suffer
disease
like high sugar.
In conclusion, many Add an article
a disease
people
have sugar-based drinks
without considering the outcomes, but they have to be aware about
the Change the preposition
of
products
and it
contents which are written on the back. Some Correct pronoun usage
their
people
think that having sugar-based drinks
keeps them hydrated and refreshed but in the near future
they can suffer from different diseases.Add a comma
,future
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