The young people in the workforce are changing their jobs or careers every few years. What do you think are the reasons?

In modern society, it seems to be an increasingly widespread concern that young generations in the
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force tend to shift their
jobs
and occupations frequently. I think governments, businesses, and individuals are responsible for
this
. In the past, workers did not have the desire t change
jobs
as often as young workers at present. They are more loyal and their entire life has one occupation.
However
, nowadays, there is no longer case. One of the most crucial
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is the bad working conditions in workplaces.
For instance
, the pressure from their boss or someone who have an executive position.
In addition
, young employees have to deal with a heavy workload
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they did not reward with a higher salary which leads they do not have the ability to pay the bills. Not only having trouble with
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and salary but colleagues and boring and repetitive
jobs
are
also
a reason why clerks at present regularly switch companies or organizations. They can not interact or cooperate with their teammate and are usually stuck in nine-to-five
jobs
that do not give opportunities to climb the ladder.
Furthermore
, another important factor contributing to
this
phenomenon is that young employees desire to find more opportunities to change their
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life
due to the abusive environment
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they faced
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former companies. Obviously, when varying their occupations, the youth in the workforce have a chance to learn different skills and
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knowledge helping them to get
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a promotion
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promotion
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which
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their job satisfaction.
Moreover
, finding suitable career provide
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with motivation, dynamic,
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to contribute to their expertise, and
this
means that they can have
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salary to make the living. In conclusion. several factors
such
as
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working
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,
desire
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for expanding practical knowledge as well as
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skills of young people lead them to the demand for switching their occupations.
Additionally
,
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the goverment
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government
and enterprises should take effective steps and policies including increasing salaries, offering
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good working conditions and providing special perks for their young workers,
this
also
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them put more effort
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the job as well as maximize
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profits.
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