More and more people are relying on their private cars as their major means of transportation. Describe some of the problems over reliance on cars can cause and suggest at least one solution. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Private

cars

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would be the most convenient way to

transport

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if we talked about middle-class people or beyond. There are so many causes that will happen

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as the use of natural fuel which can affect global climate change. In

this

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topic

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I am going to describe transportation in my country.

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with, Public transportation in Thailand has not been developing for 60 years. People in Thailand still use an old bus from 6 decades ago. Some of those population service a BTS

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highly cost starting at 26 baht for 1 station.

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, a person who can afford a car chooses to travel by

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private car

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of public

transport

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because of its convenience.

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, In the middle-class group of society when they graduated. Most of their expense is spent

with

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on

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luxury stuff

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as watches, bags, clothes, and

cars

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.

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the amount of

cars

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is increasing every year, so it can be affected

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the environment. Not only pollution is raising but

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PM 2.5 which can cause lung disease and many other symptoms. To conclude, people should have a responsibility to maintain their community by

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using their private

cars

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and turning into use

a public

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public transport

a means of public transport

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transport

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instead

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. To solve all the problems in the

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place,

Thailand

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the Thailand

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government should be developing public

transport

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affordable price , easy to access and a brand-new bus so everyone doesn't have to suffer from bad pollution.