Some people get into debt by buying things they don`t need and can`t afford. What are the reasons for this behavior? What action can be taken to prevent people from having this problem?

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era, some individuals indulged in purchasing items that are not only unnecessary, but
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they have enough
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to buy resulting
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to pay
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debts . In
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essay, the possible causes and solutions to
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problem will be provided.
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common issue.
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, The vast majority of
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are
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not able to manage their disposable income properly.
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other words , they have not been developing
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management skills as consumerism patterns . It is undeniable that
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after getting their salaries employees tend to pay their light , water ,
land
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bills ,
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groceries and
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of clothing.
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not
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because they do not have apparel to wear but in order to satisfy their needs.
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, they make
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impulsive purchases
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at
clothe
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stores and even buy most of them
for
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debt .
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, tantalizing
advertisement
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advertisements
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of different shopping stores and products. Commercial breaks are not only ubiquitous on
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Tv but
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social
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media networks and streets. Especially in developed countries, where consumerism reached a peak , the bustling streets were filled with blankets urging
people
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to make
an impulsive purchases
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impulsive purchases
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and
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money
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from their relativities. To tackle
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this
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pressing matters ,
people
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should
have
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attend
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courses which can help to address their financial problems and improve
money
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management skills. In recent years,
people
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can sign up
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courses online .
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, reducing tempting advertisements of various products
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women's favourite cosmetics or
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brands could decline the rise of
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issue for a while .
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Instead
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media can rise awareness among
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class to invest their
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wisely and boost
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of
money
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they gain every month. In conclusion,
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nevertheless
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people
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have developed bad shopping habits leading to economic instability , they can solve
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problem by developing
money
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management skills and not representing
commercial
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commercials
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in public places could
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reduce the negative effect of
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phenomenon.
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