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Some people believe the aim of University education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of University education for both the individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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education
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graduates in order to grab better jobs whereas others believe that
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society
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arguments and explain my support for the latter view
Firstly
 looking at the
people
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education
 aims to make individuals worthy of better jobs
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Having a
University
 degree in one's resume has a good impression on the recruiter, thereby increasing the chances of a
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 job.
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 was conducted by a local engineer in the city of Jammu. The results of
this
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people
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University
education
 were holding better positions at work than those who were without
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University
education
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 the group of
people
 that believes in other benefits of
University
education
 have their arguments to support their view. They think
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education
 is a gateway for an individual to proceed into research where they can achieve something rare for themselves and can unlock the secrets that nature has to offer.
This
 will lead to a greater benefit through developments in fields of medicine come
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technology and many other fields.
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 the major breakthrough in the field of science
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 taken place in
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laboratories mostly by
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scientists who have some
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. In
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this
education
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society.
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 my opinion if an individual wants a good job
University
education
 can definitely help,
However
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University
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accordingly
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