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Many elder people are no long look after their families but are put in care home and nursing homes.What are advantages and disadvantages of this .

#people #families #care #home #homes
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Nowadays,
people
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 prefer living in nuclear families to maintain their privacy and live life as per their wishes.
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, we see that today many senior citizens are found living in old
age
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homes
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 rather than staying with their own
children
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. In
this
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 essay, I shall be discussing the merits and demerits of
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trend
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 in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, moving
parents
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 to
nursing
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nurse
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homes
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 has two main advantages. One of them is individual attention and
care
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; when older
people
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 live in old
age
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homes
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, they are looked after with great
care
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 and affection. Another main merit of
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trend
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 is that
people
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 who work in different cities can
be rest
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 assured that their
parents
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 are in safer hands. Many working professionals migrate to big cities and
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 enrol their
parents
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 in old
age
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homes
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 to make sure they do not face any difficulties.
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, according to a survey, more than half of the urban population have their old
parents
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 living in old
age
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homes
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. Though there are a few advantages to
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trend
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, I believe that there are harsher demerits associated with
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 approach.
Firstly
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, when
parents
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 cross their sixties, they tend to behave like
children
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 and need their families' support. In
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 crucial phase, parting ways with one's
parents
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 could be quite disturbing as it would lead to a feeling of loneliness. Another major disadvantage is the lack of appropriate mental
care
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. Enrolling
parents
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 in nursing
homes
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 won't give them the love they need from their
children
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.
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 would mentally break down many older
people
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 and would result in depression.
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, a majority of old
age
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homes
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 report that many senior citizens lose their hope of living due to a lack of love and affection from their
children
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. To conclude, moving
parents
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 to nursing
homes
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 has a few merits like individual attention, good
care
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 and safety.
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, I think that
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trend
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 has painful downsides
such
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 as a lack of
children
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's love and affection, which results in a feeling of depression among older
people
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.
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