Although family has a great influence on children’s life, it is the influence of outside the home that plays a bigger part in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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from family are more important than the influence of outside. In my view, I support that external

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play an essential role in teenagers'

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. Relatives and siblings who accompany

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shape teenagers' personality and their world view in the incipient period. They are the

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group who interacted with

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. In the process,

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learn what respect is and how to interact properly with others. If

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behave impolitely or improperly, their relatives would remind them of their mistakes. Unlike outside, strangers would not point out your mistake in a gentle way. The knowledge which

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learned from their siblings is necessary for their future

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because

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requires individuals to cooperate with others to achieve efficiency and effectiveness. With negotiation skills, they could be well accepted by

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and find good employment.

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, encouragement from

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positive impact on

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. When

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fail to do something, it's the comforting words from

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that let them back on track and never stop struggling.

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, thanks to advancing technology, the external

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on teenagers' character are increasing year

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year and gradually become the most influential one.

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, in the past, the connections between

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and

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weakened once the age of

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reached 18 years old which is a legally dependent age in the majority of countries.

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, in the new era,

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technological improvement accelerated

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process because social media gathers millions of people and acts as an online

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.

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have the opportunity to communicate with others online

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of only making friends with their neighbours.

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, the research showed that apart from study and daily routine jobs, the average hour scion spent on social media is highly equal to 5 hours per day in China. The

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period accounts for most of their free

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. They literally have little

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to stay with their

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dived into online

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, only without parents' intervention,

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young resort to the capacity of dealing with conflicts by themselves and

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address tough challenges independently, which they can learn from

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of their family.

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, if a child takes a trip with his friends

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of family, he will gain some power in decision-making maybe about which historic sites to visit and practise managing the budget. But if he travels with family, he is not the leader but acts as a follower. When they found that they were stalked by strangers, they would react to the threat immediately by calling an emergency number for help. What they learned from their parents are skills but what they learned from

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would become their own experience.

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, their capacities are strengthened and well prepared for future challenges. A

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which is more influential relative to the family is an arena where

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become stronger. In a word, we should not underestimate the

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of

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, whereas the external environment is more influential in the young's

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. To achieve sustainable

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, it's worthwhile to spend more

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in

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