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Some people think that all University students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future,such as though related to Science and Technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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There is a diversity of
subjects
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 which one can
study
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 at a
University
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. A section of
people
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 suggests that students of a
University
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 should only
study
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subjects
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 revolving around Science and Technology the
subjects
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 that can true fruitful in the future; whereas another section feels that
University
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 students must be given the freedom to
study
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 any subject that they prefer.
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 acid both the arguments and explain my opinion for the latter view.
Firstly
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 looking at the group of
people
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 advocating for the Science and Technology related subject; they believe that the main aim of a
University
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 education is to get better job opportunities and earn more money. These
people
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 believe that can be achieved by studying the
subjects
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 of Science and Technology only as these fields 10 have greater financial advantages.
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, I am in complete agreement with the population's thinking of letting
people
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study
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 whatever they want. They believe to
study
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 properly and Excel one should enjoy what they
study
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. Studies and Research show that if those fields are being learnt, in which a student has great curiosity, the chances of excelling are very high. In my own personal experience, when I studied mathematics at
university
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, I never enjoyed mathematics and always found it difficult to score well in mathematics which was very stressful. To conclude and environmental student studying a variety of
subjects
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 of their liking will definitely be a better option as it will bring less stress and better life among the students.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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