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Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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It is often argued that violent programs and
games
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 improve lousy
behavior
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 in
people
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, while others suggest that
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 does not affect
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's
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. I believe, violent entertainment makes
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 more violent. The following paragraphs will highlight my opinion based on both beliefs with relevant examples.
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 of all, violent
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,
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 as shut, killing, and fighting have been increasing in recent years. Nowadays, many children have the access to these kinds of
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, and with that, children grow up in an environment learning the strategies of being a better killer and bad manners.
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, a child who is only five years old knows about all the weapons and how to use them.
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, they
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 get angry while playing and release the stress of killing and fighting in video
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.
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, adults have been expressing more violence in many situations.
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 because individuals have been watching too much bad news and
people
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 tend to copy others' actions. Some programs showed the traffic and in many, situations drivers try to solve their problems and stresses by taking a fight with others.
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 it is not the best way to resolve
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, the watcher's support is aside.
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, the news program is always showing someone who has taken advantage of fighting, a family at home makes who wons as a hero and in a similar situation, they would do the same. To conclude, in my opinion, violent
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 and tv programs encourage
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 to be more violent. There should have better content for both children and adults.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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