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Some students take one year off berween school and university .Do advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Some
people
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 agree that , in recent years, more
students
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 get
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year
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the year
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 off during their school time or university .Yet, there remains some disagreement as to whether the overall effect of
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 off
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 has been positive or negative While there are certainly valid arguments to the contrary , I personally believe that the benefits of the
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year
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 far outweigh its drawbacks. These benefits are twofold.
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 of all, it is an indisputable fact that taking one
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 off
help
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students
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' health. For
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instance
, some
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 need to go
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 and cure themselves while they study .If
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people
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 are not healthy, they cannot understand lessons and cannot do their
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homework
, even they cannot move.Another advantage of
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 situation is that
students
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 may exchange their knowledge with foreign
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 in other countries.
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this
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 many
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 can improve their skills. It is true to say that a
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 off is advantageous for both the
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 and their country.
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,
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,there is one very convincing point the
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 may lag behind
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their classmates who
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 of the same age .
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 they may
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not
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receive
 significant experience . The idea of being late should not
also
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 be neglected , as it adds more weight in support of the argument. Another obvious disadvantage is that if
people
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 take a holiday one
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 off
then
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 they will lose their interest
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 studying.
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, after a
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 of
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a treat
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 for an illness, they will leave their interests
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 any field. By way of my conclusion, I once again reaffirm my subjective view on
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 contentious issue is positive. Some
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recieve
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receive
received
 important experiences from a
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 off.
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