People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is an opinion that
people
in our time
has
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more
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a more
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comfortable
life
than
people
which
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who
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lived in previous times. I definitely agree with
this
statement, because l can give some evidence in
favor
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of
this
point of view.
First
of
all
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I
want
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say about medicine and
duration
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the duration
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of human
life
. Earlier
people
live
during
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around fifty years.
Now
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this
indicator can reach one hundred years.
This
happened thanks to the achievements of science in medicine. Scientists have come up with new methods of treating complex diseases, invented medicines that were not previously available and medical devices that were not previously available to mankind.
Second
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evidence
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that
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apply
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is
technology
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a technology
the technology
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that
help
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people
every day and makes our
life
more effective. I mean mobile phones,
there
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ere
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are
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help us to communicate with relatives and friends
for
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example, laptops which help us organise some work or study. Various applications for health, work and study, smart home services. All
this
was not there before and all
this
makes our
life
on the 21
web
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more comfortable and of high quality. The
third
point will be the development of infrastructure. Every year the space around us is developing:
new
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and new
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houses, schools, kindergartens, universities, shopping and business
centers
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centres
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are being built. They
also
plant plants and improve parks. All
this
improves the environment
there
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where
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we live. In
conclusion
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I want
second
time
say
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that nowadays
people
definitely have
more
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a more
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comfortable and safe
life
than several decades ago thanks to progress in the fields of medicine,
various
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and various
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technologies, as well as thanks to human
labor
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Quality of life
  • Technological advances
  • Healthcare systems
  • Life expectancy
  • Information access
  • Digital tools
  • Comfort and convenience
  • Modern conveniences
  • Mental health
  • Environmental degradation
  • Urbanization
  • Human rights
  • Social advancement
  • Life satisfaction
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