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The best way to motivate employees is to increase their salaries. Do you agree with this statement? Are there any other ways to encourage employees to work more efficiently?

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Motivation is the key to getting the
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 done by employees. Some people think that increasing payroll is the perfect way to inspire them to
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 to the optimum. I disagree with
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 as there are various ways of motivation to boost the morale of the staff.
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 it seems that higher salaries help people to stay motivated and perform better . I don't believe that increasing income will keep them motivated for long periods. So to keep them going companies have to increase their pay from time to time, which is unsustainable for the long term as it will be too expensive for them. Incentives related to performance may
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 better than salaries as annual bonuses paid to workers will keep them motivated throughout the year.
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, Banks pay annual bonuses to the staff according to their achievement, bonus may be from zero for low job performers to a significant amount for best performance.
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, it will keep them motivated to
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 toward their goals and to get maximum results.
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, there is one non-monetary incentive ,
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 , choosing the employee of the month every month, which will motivate the institute to reach the target and feel good to be recognised by the authorities for their
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 is helpful to keep the staff motivated on regular basis. To conclude,increasing salaries is not only the source to keep the department motivated but there are various ways to motivate them. Different incentives inspire them to
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 with dedication and interest by keeping the company's financial situation under control.
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