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With all the problems in the world today, spedning money on space exloration is a complete waste. The money could be better spent on other causes.

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In recent decades, most
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nations around the
world
 significantly has spent a lot of
money
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universe
 exploration. Those resources should be applied to the inside of the earth since putting
money
 on technological improvements for astronauts or spaceships
is
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 regarded as a serious
wastage
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. In
this
 essay, I would like to explain how the nations should use the
money
 for our
living-environment
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living environment
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.
First
 of all, It is
the
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 fact that in the
world
 there are a number of
human-beings
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human beings
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 affected by detrimental illnesses
such
 as Covid-19 or influenza.
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, the difficulty of acquiring vaccinations for
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serious diseases has
been
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spread out regardless of developed and developing countries as there is
tendency
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 to increase the price of injections because of the
high-demands
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.
Therefore
, the resources like currencies and actual
human-assistance
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has
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 to be utilized to improve
human-welfare
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human welfare
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 or
researching
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 new medicines not aiming for space exploration.
Secondly
, NASA recently proved that
although
 many countries
has
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 been put more than
billion
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 dollars of cash into
universe
 developments, the actual success rate of launching
spaceship
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spaceships
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 is below 16%. Since
then
, it has importantly been recommended that turning the purpose of
universe
 exploration into helping worlds struggling with
starvations
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, drought or climate
changes
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 will be able to reduce the number of suffering individuals over the
world
.
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,
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society and communities need to consider
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way to decrease
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world
-influencing challenges
instead
 of enhancing
universe
 technology. In conclusion, the countries in the
world
 have to put the resources to resolve the problems inside of the earth not the outside of the planet. In my opinion, saving
human-beings
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 and providing assistance
for
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the
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nature has
be
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 to the
first-priority
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 rather than consuming
the
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 massive amount of
money
into
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universe
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