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A letter to a utility company explaining a problem with your billing

#utility #company
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to bring to your
attentionto
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attention
a problem with my recent
electricity
 bill. I received my bill statement on 14 December
,
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 2022. I have noticed some amount is added as a deposit for the
electricity
 usage. I have been your customer for the
last
 five years and I have deposited one thousand dollars
upon
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 the time of the initial installation. I have informed
also
 the
deposited
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 will be one time and after that monthly utility bill against my usage will be only applicable to me. I would like to inform you
also
 about the irregularity of the billing cycle. Your employee, who is usually taking the reading of the
electricity
 meter,
taking
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 our
electricity
 meter readings on different dates in each month, which is making it difficult
me
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 to analyse monthly wise consumption. we would appreciate it if you could fix a date for the meter reading I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully Jennifer Ramos
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