Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing it, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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A few individuals accept that there should be settled disciplines for each sort of
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the
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for each
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more and more
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someone due to anything he/she that
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done will punish their surrounding as they punish the guilty person.
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must think about his/her family as the guiltier will be punished.
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as they know what is the
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and by regretting what
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they did they might still be murderers.
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will be not
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are different and they all have their own complexity, my opinion is judge can only one who can decide the
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punishments
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for the murderer. In summary, with or without punishment the amount of
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increased
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and without punishing them they will be more than we think so is better to see the judge see the situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fixed punishments
  • consistency
  • predictability
  • deter crime
  • potential offenders
  • streamline
  • judicial process
  • bias
  • corruption
  • complexity
  • human behavior
  • circumstances
  • justice system
  • intent
  • remorse
  • socio-economic background
  • rehabilitate offenders
  • recidivism rates
  • flexible punishment systems
  • inconsistencies
  • perceived injustices
  • public trust
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