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In many workplaces, online communication is now more common than face to face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

#workplaces #communication #face #meetings #trend
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 as it whether online
communication
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 impediment to society. In
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online
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industrial companies and helps us to save time and money. To decipher
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, most of the meetings take place online in the IT Industry.
Therefore
,
employee
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 don't need to travel to places to attend the meeting. Another observation in
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Communication
 is giving the platform to constantly connect with other people through audio or video calls. In short, the inducement of its bright side is self-evident. The rearmost coherent factor to be considered which cannot be neglected is most of our leaders around the globe
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 online meetings, implement new trades contract is building relationships between countries. Another rationale which hauls me to Parton is during the extreme climate conditions,
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 meeting has plethora
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 including
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 students. Needless to say, all the points stand in
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good stead. To
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synthesize
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virtuae
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virtual
virtue
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 of online
communication
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.
However
,
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face
 meeting is unavoidable in some cases.
For instance
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. Owning to the stated reason, I'm profoundly convinced that
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 of
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 the cons.
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