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The most important function of music is that it helps people reduce stress.to what extend do you agree or disagree.

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There has long been a public debate about the fact that
melody
 has an integral role in the community's activity and it makes a contribution to decreasing
weight
,
furthermore
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 I am a huge fan of
this
 theory and the reasons for my opinion about
this
 topic will be discussed in
this
 essay. In
this
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these
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 contemporary
circumstances
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 population
are
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is
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 suffering from huge
weight
 because of some problems
such
 as recession or family issues in their activity
thus
 social members need to do some preventable treatment to reduce their
weight
 and obviously not only does
melody
 play a profound impact on curbing
weight
 but
also
 it can enhance people's enthusiasm.
for example
, numerous studies from Oxford University have found that people who listen to songs for half an hour will increase their passion and decrease
the
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weight
 or even the pressures that they are experiencing in their activity. It seems to me that
melody
 performs a key role in curing diseases like depression or mental demolition
thus
 listening to songs or singing can help social members who are fighting mental diseases and there is no denying the fact that
melody
 is able to encourage the crowd to pursue their heart with passion. For instant listening to
melody
 exert a positive and astonishing effect on students' minds before exams and it helps students to mitigate their nervousness. To sum up, in
this
 modern and sophisticated world songs performs a key role in people's minds so
it
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 can make a contribution to reducing their anxiety and it is crystal clear that piece boosts the enthusiasm and passion of students and social members
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