People living in the 21st century have a better life quality than people who lived in previous times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In
this
contemporary era, some individuals think that the public who living
in the 21st century have Wrong verb form
lives
improved
and Correct article usage
an improved
high-quality
of lifestyle than that of the population who lived in Correct your spelling
higher quality
old
time. I agree with the statement and give the reasons for my agreement in the body paragraphs.
First and foremost, the advancements in Correct article usage
the old
the
technology change the way Correct article usage
apply
person
Correct article usage
a person
live
his/her life. To explain, nowadays Change the verb form
lives
advance
devices Replace the word
advanced
such
as computers and smart phones
make Correct your spelling
smartphones
individuals
work and life easy, Change noun form
individuals'
individual's
while
in the past people
needed to did
all Wrong verb form
do
work
by Correct article usage
the work
them self
. Correct your spelling
themself
themselves
Moreover
, in the old times quality of transportation facilities
were
low Correct subject-verb agreement
was
compare
to the present. Wrong verb form
compared
For example
, seven decades before in India to travel 300km it taken
serval days Wrong verb form
took
while
these days it only takes a few hours. Thus
, 21st century technology makes people
lives more comfortable.
Change noun form
people's
Additionally
, in the past
a number of Add a comma
past,
people
die
Wrong verb form
died
due to
the
diseases that were Correct article usage
apply
the
impossible to Correct article usage
apply
cured
. To illustrate, in the 80s there were numerous diseases that infected humans and because of less medical Change the form of the verb
cure
facilities
and knowledge people
end-up lost
lives, Wrong verb form
ended up losing
while
, in this
modern era, medical facilities
provide all types of the
medications and Correct article usage
apply
cure
. Correct subject-verb agreement
cures
For example
, in the past rabies was infected and killed a lot of people
, which now become common
infection because of the vaccine. Correct article usage
a common
Therefore
, 21st century people
more
Correct your spelling
are
safe
than old times Correct word choice
safer
people
.
In the
conclusion, technological advancements in transport and medical Correct article usage
apply
facilities
, also
Rephrase
such as
invention
of mobiles and laptops make Add an article
the invention
an invention
people
lives easy in all fields.Change noun form
people's
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