More and More wild animals are on the verge of annihilation and others are on the rare list. What are the reasons for this? What can be done to solve the problem.

Due to globalisation and industrialisation,
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number of
animals
are disappearing from the globe.
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unjustified needs are the main reasons for
this
and for solving
this
major issue, Government should take strict
actions
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against the wrongdoers. To start with, People started deforestation in the need of more and more space and started constructing big and fancy buildings without considering
needs
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of
wild-life
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wildlife
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,
moreover
use of plastic material harms the ecosystem in
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way.
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cheap bags sustain in the environment for 100
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years and affects the balance of nature.
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for our own amusement, people are using
animals
like articles as they are not having
life
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.
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, I have seen multiple people in the Zoo throwing stones
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the monkeys for their
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happiness without thinking about the pain, they are giving to the innocents.
On the other hand
, Government should implant strict rules for the community to use
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plastic and other
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hazardous
material and should impose proper penalties for
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of
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wild
animals
.
Secondly
, Rule Makers should
also
take into account the concern of annihilation of rare species by procuring them from
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of
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,
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strict
guideliness
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guidelines
should be made for hunting. For
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, The Prime Minister of India
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has recently imported
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four
tiger
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and created a safe house for them in West Bengal even he
also
issued guidelines for the list of rare habitats and prosecution in the event of hunting these creatures. In nutshell, Society at a large should take
resonsibility
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responsibility
for taking care of natural
inhabitats
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inhabitants
habitats
,
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law-makers and humans both jointly shake hands to preserve and take care of wild
animals
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annihilation
  • on the verge
  • wild animals
  • reasons
  • habit loss
  • destruction
  • poaching
  • illegal wildlife trade
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • lack of awareness
  • education
  • ineffective
  • conservation measures
  • legislation
  • enforcement
  • sustainable practices
  • protected areas
  • wildlife sanctuaries
  • raising public awareness
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