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Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that supports universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Support your answers with specific reasons and examples.

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Nowadays, the quality of the educational system of a
country
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 is vital since it influences the development of a nation. From my perspective, it does not matter whether the schools are government or not, taxes should be paid by every citizen of a
country
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.
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, the state increases edification through funds
such
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 as taxes for building up the schools to help children of lower-income families to get the same access to
education
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.
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, we all benefit from the
education
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 that students receive in public institutions.
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, our future doctors, firefighters, and teachers’ people whom we rely on everyday-are educated in local public schools. Providing an excellent
education
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 in the public school system is vital to the strength of our community and our
country
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.
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, tax is not right but mandatory for citizens because it is beneficial for the
country
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's development. It can be the source of a
country
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's income which can be used to support infrastructure and
education
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. To conclude, I believe that paying taxes is one way to contribute to the development of our
country
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, especially in
education
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 since it can be a source of income for a
country
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.
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