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Families who do not send their children to government financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that supports universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? Support your answers with specific reasons and examples.

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Families who do not send their
children
 to public
school
 should be required to pay taxes that support public
education
. Every child in my country is required to attend
school
 and every child is welcome to enrol at his/her local public
school
. Some families choose to send their
children
 to other
schools
, and it is their prerogative to do so.
However
, public
schools
 are used by the majority of our
children
 and must remain open
for
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 everyone.
For example
, my uncle sent his two
children
 to a private academy for primary
school
.
Then
 he lost a huge amount of money through some poor investments and he could no longer afford the private
school
’s tuition. The
children
 easily transferred to their local public
school
 and liked it even more than their academy. The public
schools
 supported their family when they had no money to educate their
children
. Because public
schools
 educate so many citizens, everyone in my country-whether parent or not-should pay taxes to support our educational system. We all benefit from the
education
 that students receive in public
schools
. Our future doctors, firefighters, and teachers people whom we rely on everyday-are educated in local public
schools
. When a person is in trouble, it’s reassuring to know that those who will help you
such
 as fire fighters-know what they’re doing because they received good training in
school
 and later. Providing an excellent
education
 in the public
school
 system is vital to the strength of our community and our country. Our government must offer the best
education
 available, but it can only do so with the financial assistance of all its citizens.
Therefore
, everyone including family who does not send their
children
 to public
school
-should support public
education
 by paying taxes
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