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Governments suits paid money on railways whether than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Many people nowadays see governments
buliding
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building
railways
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 for the citizens around their cities and
paid
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paying
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less
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fewer
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attentions
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attention
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on
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to
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roads
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,
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apply
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if compared
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railways
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to railways
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 and
roads
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eveyone
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everyone
 in the city can see that
railways
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 clearly are worth
than
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more than
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roads
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 significantly.
To begin
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 with,in my
opinion
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,opinion
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 I agree with governments to
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bulid
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build
 more
railways
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 because
on
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,on
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 one hand, there can make facilities
to
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for
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 people who
lives
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live
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 in town.
For example
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,
railways
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 can reduce the distance in the city and can due to people around here
have
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having
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 more
relationship
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relationships
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 but
on the other hand
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,
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bulid
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build
railways
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are
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apply
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used much
of
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apply
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money and used much
of
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apply
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force to
constructed
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construct
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if
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apply
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compared with
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bulid
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build
roads
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.
However
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,I think in the long
terms
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term
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 that will
good
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be good
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 for citizens in the city.
Next
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,I will talk about
roads
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 even though I said
railways
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 are better than
roads
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 but I
did'
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didn't
did
t
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 say to
use
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 all time and cash on
railways
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 because
railways
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 are one of
solutions
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the solutions
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 to help citizens in town but not all of
solutions
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the solutions
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 anythings have profits and drawbacks so in my opinion don'
t
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use
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 one thing to solve all problem.
For instance
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,
sometime
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sometimes
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roads
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 are useful and can transfer things
in
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to
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individual
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individuals
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 easier than
railways
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 because
railways
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are
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are used
are using
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use
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time
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the time
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 to construct and specific so there can'
t
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use
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 in
sometime
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some time
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 but
roads
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 can do it. In conclusion,I strongly agree with
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the government
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government
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government's
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paid
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paying
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 money
to
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on
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 building
railways
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 but I suggest to
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bulid
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build
 more
roads
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 too because
that
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those
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 two things
are have
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have
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own
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their own
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 profits and
own
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their own
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 drawbacks government can pay attention to
railways
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 but don'
t
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forgot
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forget
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roads
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the roads
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.

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