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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. Discuss both ideas and tell me your opinion.

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Owning a
house
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 is most
people
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's dream these days, but not all
people
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 can afford to have a
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. Some of the countries like Malaysia, a lot of
people
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 can afford to buy a
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 due to the lower price market.
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, in some developed countries like Singapore, their citizen prefers to renting a
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. In my opinion, renting a
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 is more flexible for
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 that have a low income.
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 essay will discuss more details about the ideas.
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,
people
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 who
rent
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 a
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 usually are not native
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, some of them are foreigners who come to work and do not intend to be a citizen of the country.
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, when
people
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rent
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 a
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 they will not have to pay advance payments or interest for the
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, which is they will pay only a
rent
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 price that tohave be agreed on
the
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 rental agreement, the utilities bills and repairs that needs for the
house
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also
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 only be paid by the
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 owner.
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, the
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 owner
also
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 has benefits when
people
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rent
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 their
house
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, they did not
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worried
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 about every month of instalment from the bank, which they can pay through the rental fees. condition of the
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also
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 be maintained by rental, they may only cover utilities and the repairs sometimes. The
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also
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 can be an asset for the owner due to the increasing value of the property each year. In my conclusion,
people
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 should
rent
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 a
house
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 because they can downsize anytime, it makes an easier way when they can not afford it or if something suddenly happens and changes in their life.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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