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In some countries, people prefer to rent a house to live in, while in other countries people prefer to buy their own house. Discuss both ideas and tell me your opinion.

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Owning a
house
 is most
people
's dream these days, but not all
people
 can afford to have a
house
. Some of the countries like Malaysia, a lot of
people
 can afford to buy a
house
 due to the lower price market.
However
, in some developed countries like Singapore, their citizen prefers to renting a
house
. In my opinion, renting a
house
 is more flexible for
people
 that have a low income.
This
 essay will discuss more details about the ideas.
Firstly
,
people
 who
rent
 a
house
 usually are not native
people
, some of them are foreigners who come to work and do not intend to be a citizen of the country.
Moreover
, when
people
rent
 a
house
 they will not have to pay advance payments or interest for the
house
, which is they will pay only a
rent
 price that tohave be agreed on
the
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 rental agreement, the utilities bills and repairs that needs for the
house
also
 only be paid by the
house
 owner.
However
, the
house
 owner
also
 has benefits when
people
rent
 their
house
, they did not
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to
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worried
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 about every month of instalment from the bank, which they can pay through the rental fees. condition of the
house
also
 be maintained by rental, they may only cover utilities and the repairs sometimes. The
house
also
 can be an asset for the owner due to the increasing value of the property each year. In my conclusion,
people
 should
rent
 a
house
 because they can downsize anytime, it makes an easier way when they can not afford it or if something suddenly happens and changes in their life.
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