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In the past 100 years, there are many inventions such as antibiotics, airplanes, and computers. What do you think is the most important invent for the past 100 years? Why?

#years #inventions #antibiotics #airplanes #computers
In the
last
century
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 the civilization of humanity has
develop
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developed
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 a
lot
 of valuable inventions which have affected
the
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human being in a positive way. In
this
 essay, I am going to write about the most important invention
in
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 my point of view.
To begin
 with, a
lot
 of mistakes happened in the lab while doing experiments and
this
 how did the saviour of humanity
on
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in
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 the 20th century. Dr Mark who was working
on
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in
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 his lab when he thought made a huge mistake when he didn't realise that he made
the
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history. He put some kind of
bactieria
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bacteria
 over an experiment he was working on. After a
lot
searching
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of searching
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 and studying
this
 material could heal a
lot
 of
the
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well-known illnesses and
deises
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diseases
devises
, which
called
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are called
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 now
the
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antibiotics. Nowadays, we can feel the impact of
this
 thing and we can not imagine how can we live without it. I mean that we saw the advantages of using antibiotics over the years and how many lives
has
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 been saved. Among all the inventions we can say that
this
 was the most positively effective invention and the least harmful, all of the others had a bad
effection
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affection
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to
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on
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 the human himself, like the internet, computers , mobile phones and a
lot
 the other things that we think that it made our life easier, but it destroys our life secretly. In conclusion, scientists have been and still working as they could and spending
there
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their
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 lives to give humanity the hand to be developed
to
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 the better.
Moreover
, we can say that we can not ignore the positive side of the latest invention in the
last
 few decades, but we have to be careful and search and choose wisely what we are using.
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